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The prompt is "I didn't go to her funeral"
Sorry for being annoying, but please give feedback on what I can do to improve and also grade it as a year 9 selective school essay. We only get 15 minutes to write and I'm wondering if the introduction is long enough and is the hook good enough. Any feedback is appreciated. Thanks.
Have you ever had one of those days when you can't accept what happened, like one of your pets died or you lost your favourite toy? I have but on a much more serious note, a sin that can't be forgiven. I didn't go to her funeral.
Sorry for being annoying, but please give feedback on what I can do to improve and also grade it as a year 9 selective school essay. We only get 15 minutes to write and I'm wondering if the introduction is long enough and is the hook good enough. Any feedback is appreciated. Thanks.
Have you ever had one of those days when you can't accept what happened, like one of your pets died or you lost your favourite toy? I have but on a much more serious note, a sin that can't be forgiven. I didn't go to her funeral.
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