Correctness of a phrase in lyrics for a song

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Hello everyone,

Here a question about the correctness of a phrase which is meant for the lyrics in a song. Not being a native English speaker, I'm in a doubt which of these phrases is perfectly correct/incorrect in English:

1. "Do you dream in colors or you dream in black and white?"

2. "Do you dream in colors or dream in black and white?'

(Meaning: "your dreams are they in colors or in black and white?")

Or if that's ambiguous, then wouldn't it be better to put it:

3. "Do you dream in colors or it is in black and white?"

Or any other suggestions?

Thanks for your feedback and best vibes !
BD

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This would be most typical: "Do you dream in color or [in] black and white?" Note that "color" is singular and the second "in" is optional.

If you need more syllables, you can use number 2 provided you change "colors" to "color".
 

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This would be most typical: "Do you dream in color or [in] black and white?" Note that "color" is singular and the second "in" is optional.

If you need more syllables, you can use number 2 provided you change "colors" to "color".

Yes, I need more syllables. And in fact, for rhyming purposes, 'colors' needs to be in plural to rhyme with 'horrors'. Here's my whole verse (corrected as suggested):


"Do you dream in colors,
or dream in black and white?
'Cause all joys and horrors
they run through day and night."


Or, instead of that, couldn't I use:
"Do you dream in colors,
or is it in black and white?" ??
 
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The plural colors works fine there. It's okay to stretch a little here and there in lyrics.

The version with "is it in black and white" would be okay by the same logic, but I think it sounds clumsy and rather like something written by a non-native English speaker. :) Stick with the first version.
 
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