Application letter correction

[ttal54]

Hello

I need your help to correct my application letter for a spontaneous application internship. Any improvement or suggestion is welcome.

Here is the letter :

Subject: Spontaneous application for internship




Dear Sir or Madam


French student, passionated about new technologies I would like increase my international experience in this field and improve my english. For these reasons, I am applying for an internship paid or not from 24th July to 25th August in your company, where I will be happy to help you to raise it.


Currently, in first year of « Classes Préparatoires aux Grandes Ecoles », it is actually Two-year highly selective classes which prepare for the competitive exams to the best « Grandes Ecoles ».
This intensive course to become engineer, give me many abilities such as a strong organisation, fast learning and adaption of any situation.


I have a few computer skills (coding, database..), since I love learning, I aim to use this summer holiday to improve my hardware knowledge and my practice.
I am very dynamic and easy-going person who likes working efficiently, in a good atmosphere as my experience in a youth centre shows.


Motivated, I am used to always invest all myself in the tasks that I perform, so I really hope you will give me the opportunity to get new skills .


I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.


Yours faithfully.


Thanks You

 

[teechar]

Hello,

I need your help to correct my application letter for a spontaneous application internship. Any improvement or suggestion is welcome.

Here is the letter:

Subject: Spontaneous application for internship

Dear Sir or Madam,

I'm a French student, and I'm passionate about new technologies. I would like to increase my international experience in this field and improve my English. For these reasons, I am applying for an internship (paid or not) from 24th July to 25th August in your company, where I will give it my best effort. [STRIKE]be happy to help you to raise it.[/STRIKE]

Currently, I'm in my first year of Classes Préparatoires aux Grandes Ecoles. It is [STRIKE]actually[/STRIKE] a two-year highly selective [STRIKE]classes[/STRIKE] program which prepares students for the competitive entry exams to the best Grandes Ecoles.

This intensive course to become an engineer [STRIKE]give[/STRIKE] will teach me many [STRIKE]abilities[/STRIKE] skills such as [STRIKE]a strong[/STRIKE] organisation, fast learning and adaption [STRIKE]of any[/STRIKE] to various situations.

I have [STRIKE]a few[/STRIKE] good computer skills (coding and databases) and, since I love learning, I aim to use this summer holiday to improve my knowledge of hardware [STRIKE]knowledge[/STRIKE] and my programming skills. [STRIKE]practice.[/STRIKE]

I am a very dynamic and easy-going person who likes working efficiently [STRIKE], in a good atmosphere[/STRIKE] and collaboratively, as my experience in a youth centre shows.

Motivated, I am used to always investing all my effort [STRIKE]self[/STRIKE] in the tasks that I perform, so I really hope you will give me the opportunity to get new skills.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.


Yours faithfully,

Jamie Colt

[STRIKE] Thanks You[/STRIKE]

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