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[RadishQueenLearner]

The Young Elites is a fantasy novel by Marie Lu, the same author who wrote the successful dystopian trilogy Legend. It is about a young girl named Adelina Amouteru and her life after a fever that swept the Sealands a decade ago, which gave her special abilities. It is a character vs. society conflict between the Inquisitors, the group that is trying to find and kill all malfettos, and Adelina, the main character. The story begins one rainy night in her father’s villa. A guest had come, and he was there to do business. Her cruel father was pleading with the man who had come to do business with him, as no one else wanted to business with a man who has a malfetto (someone who was marked by the blood fever) daughter. They started talking about the Young Elites, powerful malfettos that had unearthly powers. Nobody knew where they were and their names, but everyone knew of their nicknames. “The Reaper. Magiano. The Windwalker. The Alchemist.” The man finally came up with a deal, he’d give Adelina’s father money to pay his debts if he’d give Adelina to him. She ran to her room, packed a sack, and as she was packing her sister, Violetta, came. Violetta had also gotten the blood fever, like her sister and mother (their mother had died from the fever), but she had gotten no markings. She made Violetta promise that she wouldn’t turn her in and tell her father where she went. She then escaped to the marketplace. Her father found her and attempted to capture her. As he is trying to capture her, phantoms appear. They lunge for her father and kill him. Adelina sits there, confused. She loses track of the time that she sits there. She then starts riding on her horse across the Sealands for days, until Inquisitors (The policemen who are loyal to the throne and whose job is to catch malfettos) capture her, and Violetta had agreed to a promise that if she spoke for Adelina, that the Inquisitors would let her go. Adelina is put in a cell, “shackled to the wall of a wet dungeon cell with no windows and no light, without a trial, without a soul in the world.... It doesn’t matter, anyway. I’m going to die tomorrow morning.” The story then switches to the perspective of Enzo, the leader of a society called the Daggers, receives a message from someone named the messenger that says, “I’ve found her. Come to Dalia at once.” The story then comes back to our heroine, Adelina. It’s the next day, and Adelina is taken to be burned in front of the crowds. A boy appears in the crowd. Her is incredibly rude to the Inquisitors and they lunge for him. The boy, Enzo, somehow makes the flames stop. He rescues Adelina and takes her to the Daggers’ headquarters in Estenzia, across the country from Dalia. The boy who saved her, The Reaper (Enzo), asks who she is and what she can do, and tells her about the Daggers, a society whose goal is to find malfettos like them with powers and work together to destroy the Inquisition. It then cuts to a scene where Teren Santoro, the lead Inquisitor, tells the Queen what happened. It goes back to Adelina, a week later, when she is introduced to Raffaele Laurent Bessette, The Messenger. He can sense other Elites and can find out what they are thinking by reaching for their energies. Raffaele tests Adelina to find out what she aligns with (fear, fury, passion, and ambition). Raffaele is shocked by these results and instructs Enzo to kill her before she becomes a serious threat, but Enzo refuses. We then learn with that Teren the Inquisitor is a malfetto himself, and his goal is to get rid of all malfettos. Then, someone tells him that he can find Adelina and the other Daggers, his enemies, in Fortuna Court. He sneaks into one of the performances at the Court that the Daggers are performing, and proceeds to get Adelina alone. He tells her that she has 5 days to tell him all the information she has on the Daggers and betray them. 5 days pass, and all the Daggers except Adelina have gone on a mission. She goes to see Teren and is forced to tell him that they are planning something for the annual horse race, the Tournament of Storms. He lets her leave, but orders more information for next time. She then goes to the Tournament of Storms, where she is shocked to see the hatred for the king and his ways first hand. In the Tournament, there are four quarters. Red, Blue, Green, and Gold. As the Green Quarter racers are coming out, she is shocked to learn that one of the Daggers, the Star Thief, is competing. Her real name is Lady Gemma, as she is the only Dagger that is a noble lady. “Lady Gemma of House Salvatore, riding Master Aquino’s glorious stallion Keepsake!” As expected, she is insulted by the spectators because Gemma is a malfetto, but it surprised Adelina to see that a lot of people supported Gemma. With her skill with animals and the Daggers’ help, Gemma won. The Inquisition punishes Gemma as an example for malfetto supporters, and unable to watch, Adelina steps in with her illusions and saves Gemma. They escape, but their plan was ruined because Adelina revealed their plan to Teren. Enzo is impressed with Adelina’s illusions and invites her to their Spring Moon mission, where their goal is to blow ships with fireworks in them to show how powerful they are. Adelina is inaugurated into the Dagger Society officially because the Spring Moons is her first mission. During that mission, even though everything went well, Teren approaches her secretly and demands that she brings him better information within 3 days, or he’ll kill Violetta. She trains with Enzo later that day and finds out that none of the Daggers like her except Enzo. This is devastating to her. In Teren’s perspective, Guiletta, the Queen and sister of Enzo, (Enzo is the rightful prince, but because he is a malfetto, he was not allowed to be the king. One of the goals of the Daggers is for Enzo to get the throne) plans to kill the king, her husband, so she can have full control with Teren by her side. He then assassinates the king, as Adelina is approaching him to betray the Daggers. She is doing this out of anger towards the Daggers for what they said. The guards outside Teren’s tower let her in, and she demands to see her sister, and Teren shows her Violetta. She then tells Teren all about the Daggers: their names, location, etc. Teren then makes her promise herself to the Inquisitors, and Adelina and Violetta escape with Violetta’s powers, the power to stop other Elites’ power. This is why Adelina never knew about her illusion powers as a kid. Read the book to find out how it ended!

I recommend this book completely, even if you don’t like this genre or don’t like reading in general. Marie Lu is one of my favorite authors for her distinct writing style. She uses the right amount of details to make you feel like you are in that world and experiencing the same things as the characters but doesn’t bore you with pages and pages describing just one character. Lu also uses emotion and creative plots to keep her readers hooked. I also like her technique of switching between characters, which is evident in all her books. This develops all characters instead of just one and shows you how different characters react to different events. However, the writing style isn’t the only thing that makes this book as good as it is. The plot doesn’t just list out an order of events, but it builds layers to the story. There’s the emotion, the setting, the development of characters, all different layers of a story that is important for it to be good. There’s also the characters themselves. The protagonist, Adelina, isn’t just a pure-hearted do-gooder that wants to save the world just out of kindness. There is a harsh, cold reality about her that makes her seem more human and real. The antagonists, Teren Santoro and the Inquisition, show the delicate balance of evil and good in the conventional “bad guy.” It makes the characters so real when the antagonist believes that what they are doing is helping people. Unlike most books, “The Young Elites” didn’t start with a prologue set 50 years before the events of the story with characters you don’t know yet, and then takes forever to get to the real story. This book’s story started on the first page, immediately. Action will start, then pause, then start again. Some people will say that quality makes the book unpredictable, but if you can predict the story, you will want to put the book down sooner. I highly recommend this book to anyone who is looking for a series to read that is different from the typical storyline of all the other books on the shelf.

 

[Raymott]

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[teechar]

Hello RaddishQueenLearner, and welcome to the forum.
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One thing I will say is that your paragraphs are way too long. Break them up into shorter ones.