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Would you please help me correct the following writing for grammars, vocabularies, ...
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Most people believe that it should be compulsory for young people to help the local community through voluntary work in their pastime. However, I do not completely agree with this statement.
From a personal perspective, it can be argued that teenagers are under high pressure with their studies so it will result in the lack of their opportunity to have spare time. Most young people may not only attend classes at school every day but also do homework and study with tutors at home. Therefore, if they are required to spend their whole free time to help local community, they may not have any time to entertain with their friend and even with their family or attend courses to improve their soft skills.
On the societal level, by forcing young people to work on volunteer basis in their free time, society will not gain any beneficial value. Firstly, it may be not fair for teenagers to sacrifice their time to do what they seem not to volunteer. Secondly, young people may not feel comfortable to be forced to do volunteer but they feel that they are being used. For example, children are required to collect all rubbish surrounding their living area on every weekend and they may have to take their all free time to do this, they will think they are being treated like a cleaner. A good society which has the best system should be a free and fair place
In conclusion, doing voluntary work to help community can be beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole. However, I believe that we should not make this compulsory.
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Most people believe that it should be compulsory for young people to help the local community through voluntary work in their pastime. However, I do not completely agree with this statement.
From a personal perspective, it can be argued that teenagers are under high pressure with their studies so it will result in the lack of their opportunity to have spare time. Most young people may not only attend classes at school every day but also do homework and study with tutors at home. Therefore, if they are required to spend their whole free time to help local community, they may not have any time to entertain with their friend and even with their family or attend courses to improve their soft skills.
On the societal level, by forcing young people to work on volunteer basis in their free time, society will not gain any beneficial value. Firstly, it may be not fair for teenagers to sacrifice their time to do what they seem not to volunteer. Secondly, young people may not feel comfortable to be forced to do volunteer but they feel that they are being used. For example, children are required to collect all rubbish surrounding their living area on every weekend and they may have to take their all free time to do this, they will think they are being treated like a cleaner. A good society which has the best system should be a free and fair place
In conclusion, doing voluntary work to help community can be beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole. However, I believe that we should not make this compulsory.
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