[Essay] Are there any mistakes in this piece of writing?

[rodgers white]

Hi everyone, are there any mistakes in this piece of writing? This is just writing practice, not an assignment or anything like that. I'm grateful for any contribution.


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Rui continued his outings, meeting people, and when he could, helping them, gaining friends and or admirers. Yang was curious to know what the council of elders thought about the idea of a sentient AI, and was not surprised to learn that they didn’t like the idea at all. What did surprise him was, they said, if any were created they should be destroyed immediately, no one was to experiment with synthetic life or intelligence. AIs were fine, but sentience, would not be tolerated. In fact, they even sent experts to Yang’s home to examine Rui’s drone, just in case. Rui played dumb when they spoke to the drone, and an internal examination showed the drone to be too limited to be sentient. Fortunately, a thorough search was not initiated because the council didn’t actually think Yang had created a synthetic mind, they were just being cautious. This gave Yang and Rui the time to take precautions for the future.

 

[Tarheel]

Artificial Intelligence

Say:

Rui continued his outings ... gaining friends and admirers.

And:

... and he was not surprised to learn ....

(Or delete the comma.)

And:

That gave Yang and Rui time to ....

There are a couple of comma splices.

(See the new, better title for this thread.)