The wind ruffled the plastic roof panel

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Is this correct and natural?

The wind ruffled the plastic roof panel over the balcony, creating a patter-like sound, giving the illusion it was raining. The sky was actually bereft of any clouds.
 

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Well, the sound of wind isn't like that of rain. And the sound of rattling windows doesn't sound like rain. Rain sounds like rain.

It doesn't work for me.
 

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Well, the sound of wind isn't like that of rain. And the sound of rattling windows doesn't sound like rain. Rain sounds like rain.

It doesn't work for me.

It happened to me. I walked in the balcony, and heard what sounded like rain. But it was the wind moving the light plastic panel which made this noise similar to patter of rain. There are two layers of plastic and when they move, you would think it's raining.
 

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It happened to me. I walked onto the balcony, and heard what sounded like rain. But it was the wind moving the light plastic panel which made a noise similar to the patter of rain. There are two layers of plastic, and when they move [no comma] you would think it's raining.

OK.
 

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Is this correct and natural?

The wind ruffled the plastic roof panel over the balcony, creating a patter-like sound, giving the illusion it was raining. The sky was actually bereft of any clouds.

I thought ruffled is used with flexible things, like hair, fabric, feathers, etc., and not something stiff like a roof panel.

How about: The plastic roof panel over the balcony was flapping with the strong wind...
 

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Is this correct and natural?

The wind ruffled the balcony's plastic awning, pattering as though it were raining though the sky was [STRIKE]actually[/STRIKE] bereft of [STRIKE]any[/STRIKE] clouds.
Or something!
 
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