alpacinou
Key Member
- Joined
- Sep 30, 2019
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- Native Language
- Persian
- Home Country
- Iran
- Current Location
- Iran
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Patrick felt waves of pain sweeping up and down his body as if all the bones in it were shattered. He drank five cups of black coffee, hoping the pain would subside. He felt like the sickly painted walls were crumbling on his head. Maybe they could end his agony. He decided to go to the roof to get some fresh air. The door of the roof had been drained of color under the relentless tropical sun. It appeared to have been a pale green in its heyday. Opening the door, Patrick stepped out onto the roof, picking up the smell of heroin. Nearby, a broken man was getting pointlessly high. He looked at the neighborhood, a dense forest of brick buildings stuffing the disorderly alleys. He looked up, seeing the wind blow apart the clouds and opening the sky to the stoic July sun.
Patrick felt waves of pain sweeping up and down his body as if all the bones in it were shattered. He drank five cups of black coffee, hoping the pain would subside. He felt like the sickly painted walls were crumbling on his head. Maybe they could end his agony. He decided to go to the roof to get some fresh air. The door of the roof had been drained of color under the relentless tropical sun. It appeared to have been a pale green in its heyday. Opening the door, Patrick stepped out onto the roof, picking up the smell of heroin. Nearby, a broken man was getting pointlessly high. He looked at the neighborhood, a dense forest of brick buildings stuffing the disorderly alleys. He looked up, seeing the wind blow apart the clouds and opening the sky to the stoic July sun.