jesco
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The semi-new fishing-rod sits used and exhausted. It has been through thick and thin, though, the rod still stands. Evaporated salt coats the exterior; yet the interior, coated with oil, is pristine. Despite its malformed looks; it retains a bit of luck. As the fishermen say: lets use it one more time; to see if it will give us a bit of luck.
Below is a revised version after your input. I also added more structure to this brief descriptive essay.
topic: a fishing rod
The semi-new fishing rod sits in an empty garage, used and exhausted. It has been through thick and thin, though the rod still stands. Salt coats the exterior of a weather beaten reel, yet the interior, coated with oil, is pristine. Despite its malformed looks, it retains a bit of luck.
The rod guides appear rusted and dainty; they are straight and aligned. They're anchored by strands of fiberglass; stronger than steel. Some have torn from their anchor points, but still remain functional.
As a whole, it represents a work-of-art, a masterpiece; a divine thing designed to capture a divine mammal.
As a whole, it will only last a while, but will retain its luck. This luck will become part of another, and so on.
thanks in advance
Below is a revised version after your input. I also added more structure to this brief descriptive essay.
topic: a fishing rod
The semi-new fishing rod sits in an empty garage, used and exhausted. It has been through thick and thin, though the rod still stands. Salt coats the exterior of a weather beaten reel, yet the interior, coated with oil, is pristine. Despite its malformed looks, it retains a bit of luck.
The rod guides appear rusted and dainty; they are straight and aligned. They're anchored by strands of fiberglass; stronger than steel. Some have torn from their anchor points, but still remain functional.
As a whole, it represents a work-of-art, a masterpiece; a divine thing designed to capture a divine mammal.
As a whole, it will only last a while, but will retain its luck. This luck will become part of another, and so on.
thanks in advance
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