[Vocabulary] A frozen dialogue?

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I have made this dialogue myself for a textbook. Could you help me change it a little so that it would sound more idiomatic, not so "frozen"? Or is it OK as it is?

S1: Anna, do you ever have a lie-in in the morning?
S2: Well, it all depends. When I have my first lesson free, I do have a lie-in sometimes. And what about you, Liz?
S1: I always wake up on time, at 7, and I get up at once. I never lie-in after I wake up.
S2: You’re so well-organised.
S1: I am indeed.
 
I don't know what you mean by 'frozen'.
 
He means stiff and unnatural.
 
I have made this dialogue myself for a textbook. Could you help me change it a little so that it would sound more idiomatic, not so "frozen"? Or is it OK as it is?

S1: Anna, do you ever have a lie-in in the morning?
S2: Well, it all depends. When I have my first lesson free, I do have a lie-in sometimes. And what about you, Liz?
S1: I always wake up on time, at 7, and I get up at once. I never lie-in after I wake up.
S2: You’re so well-organised.
S1: I am indeed.

- Anna, do you ever have a lie-in?
- Yeah, sometimes. If I've got a free period first thing, then yeah. You?
- I'm always straight up at 7. No lie-ins.
- Wow, you're organised.
- Yup.

I might have gone a bit too far away from stiff and unnatural, but it's pretty natural and colloquial.
 
Stilted might work better than frozen.
 
- Anna, do you ever have a lie-in?
- Yeah, sometimes. If I've got a free period first thing, then yeah. You?
- I'm always straight up at 7. No lie-ins.
- Wow, you're organised.
- Yup.

I might have gone a bit too far away from stiff and unnatural, but it's pretty natural and colloquial.

Thank you, now it's very lively. :) Will it be OK, if I change "yup" to "I am"?
 
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