A make up and fashion

[Gaya87]

Hi, can someone please check this the following sentences? Thanks in advance.

Short summary
12 year old Anne, a make up and fashion whiz kid magically swaps bodies with her schoolmate Christ, a star footballer. As both of them search for a solution, Anne begins to like the change.

Long summary
12-year old makeup and fashion whiz kid, Anne, has her world turned upside down, when she magically swaps bodies with her school’s star footballer, Christ. It’s 2 weeks away from the school play and the state team football tryouts. Anne and Christ search high and low for a solution. But as their search continues, the two begin to learn about each other’s world and Anne begins to love being a boy. Will Anne remain a boy? Will Christ be able to change Anne’s mind in time for his tryouts?

 

[tedmc]

12-year-old Anne, a makeup and fashion whiz kid, magically swaps bodies with her schoolmate Christ, a star footballer. As both of them search for a solution to their situation, Anne begins to like the change.

 

[teechar]

her schoolmate Christ

Are you sure that's right? The usual abbreviation is Chris.

 

[Gaya87]

Are you sure that's right? The usual abbreviation is Chris.

Hmm:-( Yes, you are right teechar. I'm sorry!

 

[Gaya87]

Revised summary as below. Please let me know if you spotted any grammar mistakes. Thanks teechar.

Short summary
12-year-old Anne, a makeup and fashion whiz kid, magically swaps bodies with her schoolmate Chris, a star footballer. As both of them search for a solution to their situation, Anne begins to like the change.

Long summary
12-year old makeup and fashion whiz kid, Anne, has her world turned upside down, when she magically swaps bodies with her school’s star footballer, Chris. It’s 2 weeks away from the school play and the state team football tryouts. Anne and Chris search high and low for a solution. But as their search continues, the two begin to learn about each other’s world and Anne begins to love being a boy. Will Anne remain a boy? Will Chris be able to change Anne’s mind in time for his tryouts?

 

[teechar]

Short summary
12-year-old Anne, a makeup and fashion whizkid, magically swaps bodies with her schoolmate Chris, a star footballer. As both of them search for a solution to their situation, Anne begins to like the change.

Long summary
12-year-old makeup and fashion whizkid, Anne, has her world turned upside down, when she magically swaps bodies with her school’s star footballer, Chris. It’s 2 weeks away from the school play and the state team football tryouts. Anne and Chris search high and low for a solution. But as their search continues, the two begin to learn about each other’s world, and Anne [STRIKE]begins[/STRIKE] starts to love being a boy. Will Anne remain a boy? Will Chris be able to change Anne’s mind in time for his tryouts?

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[tedmc]

Interestingly, most dictionaries spell "whiz kid" as two words while some spell it as a hyphenated word, "whiz-kid".

Only Macmillan Dictionary spells it as one word.

Cambridge Dictionary spells it as "whizz-kid".