[General] A sentence to be used in advertising, to get the message accross,

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This sentence seem to convey the message, I need need help to say it more effectively. To be used in offering a product that conveys a positive affirmation.

" The message is on your arm therefore always in your vision. As you see it and start saying it, your sub-conscience mind will internalize the message. If you say it constantly, it will cause a transformation - to health and well being. The sub-conscience is a million times more powerful than the conscience mind."
 

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This sentence seemS to convey the message, BUT I need need help to say it more effectively. IT IS TO be used in offering a product that conveys a positive affirmation.

You could also say:

I need help in saying it more effectively.
 

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" The message is on your arm therefore always IN SIGHT. As you see it and start saying it, your SUBCONSCIOUS mind will internalize the message. If you say it constantly, it will cause a transformation - to health and well being. The SUBCONSCIOUS is a million times more powerful than the CONSCIOUS mind."

Try it with those suggestions.
 

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How about always visible?
 

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