Anna peered though the window

[Bassim]

Would you please correct my mistakes in the following sentences. I am not sure if my punctuation is correct.

1. Anna peered through the window at the dark street where a stranger in a fedora walked passed.
2. It was impossible to imagine what Peter had gone through, but his haggard face and numerous wrinkles witnessed about his difficult time.
3. Sometimes, old Bob would sit in his garden, imagining he was still a young boy, a virgin, and a prospective man full of dreams, who had a whole life in front of him.

 

[Tarheel]

1. Anna peered through the window at the dark street where a stranger in a fedora walked by.

 

[Tarheel]

It was impossible to imagine what Peter had gone through, but his haggard face and numerous wrinkles testified to his difficult time.

 

[Tarheel]

Sometimes old Bob would sit in his garden imagining he was still a young boy, a virgin, and a man full of dreams with his whole life in front of him.

 

[emsr2d2]

It's "walked past", not "walked passed".

 

[tedmc]

2. It was impossible to imagine what Peter had gone through, but his haggard face and numerous wrinkles bore witness to his difficult times.

I think you can use "witness" as above and "times" should be plural.

3. Sometimes, old Bob would sit in his garden, imagining he was still a young boy, a virgin, and a prospective man full of dreams, who had a whole life in front of him.

"Prospective" is not appropriate. "Promising" might work.

 

[Tarheel]

Your "bore witness" is a good suggestion.

The phrase "promising man" is not something I would use.

 

[tedmc]

"Promising young man" is probably more common, but "young boy" is used in the sentence.

 

[Tarheel]

Yes, it is.

 

[BobK]

It was impossible to imagine what Peter had gone through, but his haggard face and numerous wrinkles testified to his difficult time.

Or, Bassim, if you want to use 'witness' (but as a noun rather than a verb) you could use this and put 'bore witness [to]' in place of 'testified'.

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