Are these sentences natural?

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Are these sentences natural?

1. One family said they had run from one room to room with windows exploding all around them
1. As the rest of the stuff, the manager was nervous about the director's visit.
3. My teacher said I'd never amount to anything strengthened my resolution to prove him wrong.
4. No matter where she looked, she couldn't find what she needed.
 
I am not a teacher.

Only 4. sounds natural, and I don't think it needs the comma

You can improve the others by making the following small changes.

1. Remove the second "one".
2. Invert the two phrases, change "stuff" to "staff" and place "were" or "was" (depending on preference) after "as".
3. Change "said" to "saying".
 
1. One family said they had run from room to room with windows exploding all around them.

2. The manager was nervous about the director's visit, as were the rest of the staff. (OR The manager was nervous about visiting of the director, the rest of the staff were, too.)

3.
My teacher's saying that I'd never amount to anything strengthened my resolve to prove him wrong.

I changed the first ones. What about now?
 
I am not a teacher.

Much better.
 
What's wrong with this form:

The manager was nervous about visiting of the director, the rest of the staff were, too.
 
I am not a teacher.

"...about visiting of the director..." doesn't make sense.
 
It's a run-on sentence. The comma after 'director' should be a semicolon.
 
It's a run-on sentence. The comma after 'director' should be a semicolon.

What about this form:

The manager was nervous about visiting of the director. The rest of the stuff were, too.
 
No. 'The manager was nervous about the director's visit. The rest of the staff were, too.'

To return to #1, windows don't explode. They shatter.
 
You need to realise that "visiting of the director" does not mean anything. You need either "the director's visit" or "the visit of the director".
 
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