As a result, they produce fewer hormones that promote hair growth, and it leads to ha

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As a result, they produce fewer hormones that promote hair growth, and it leads to hair loss.

As a result, they produce fewer hormones that promote hair growth, which leads to hair loss.


I wrote the above sentence myself. Is it okay to change 'and it' to 'which' ?
 

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The first sentence is not right.

The second seems okay. Can you give us the sentence directly preceding it?
 

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Yes – I want to know what 'they' are.
 

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Excessive Cortisol levels persisted by chronic stress can have negative effects on the adrenal glands, which produce hormones related to hair growth. As a result, they produce fewer hormones that promote hair growth, which leads to hair loss.
 

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I suggest replacing the final clause with leading to hair loss.
 
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