[Grammar] Besides sometimes, Kevin waited outside of my house

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Hello.


Are the following sentences grammatically correct?


-Besides sometimes, Kevin waited outside of my house, or outside the any place where I was. He would stand still and stare at me. and looked at me like as if he wanted to say something, without chasing me while I was walking as he usually did. But in his eyes you could see something tht was not right. Maybe with a normal person I could think about talk to him for the last time and end all this madness to finally close the chapter so he could go on with his life. But I realized that he was a person who was definitely not normal and would never understand.

-So,what you are telling me, is that Kevin acted like your doormat, he was obsessed with you, and after you broke his heart, he didn`t take it well?"


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What are you trying to express with "Besides sometimes"? It's not natural.
 

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A doormat and a stalker are two very different things.
 

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-Besides what I said, sometimes, Kevin waited outside of my house, or outside the any place where I was. He would stand still and stare at me. and looked at me like as if he wanted to say something, without chasing me while I was walking as he usually did. But in his eyes you could see something tht was not right. Maybe with a normal person I could think about talk to him for the last time and end all this madness to finally close the chapter so he could go on with his life. But I realized that he was a person who was definitely not normal and would never understand.

-So,what you are telling me, is that first Kevin acted like your doormat, and then he was obsessed with you, and after you broke his heart, he didn`t take it well?"


Is that grammatically correct?
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-[STRIKE]Besides what I said,[/STRIKE] Also, sometimes (no comma here) Kevin waited outside [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] my house, or outside [STRIKE]the any place[/STRIKE] anywhere I was. He would stand still and stare at me (no full stop here) and [STRIKE]looked[/STRIKE] look at me [STRIKE]like[/STRIKE] as if he wanted to say something, but without chasing me while I was walking as he usually did. But in his eyes you could see something that was not right. Maybe [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] if he was a normal person I could think about talking to him for the last time and ending all this madness to finally close the chapter so he could go on with his life. But I realized that he was a person who was definitely not normal and would never understand.

-So (no comma here) what you are telling me (no comma here) is that at first Kevin acted like your doormat, [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] then he [STRIKE]was[/STRIKE] became obsessed with you (no comma here) and, [STRIKE]after[/STRIKE] when you broke his heart, he didn't take it well?"

See above.
 

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Nikitus, what you describe are the actions of a stalker. A doormat is somebody who (metaphorically) lets you walk all over him. That is not what I see being described here.

Please note carefully the corrections offered by Ems. They should be quite helpful.

You need to work on making your writing more understandable.
 

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I don't think it's unreasonable to say that at first he was a doormat but later on he became a stalker.
 

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I don't think it's unreasonable to say that at first he was a doormat but later on he became a stalker.

Yes, she uses the word doormat, but the actions she describes are inconsistent with that personality.
 
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