Bob caught sight of Laura, his old flame

[Bassim]

Have I made any mistakes?

Bob caught sight of Laura, his old flame, who he had not seen in a long time. He was in two minds weather to approach her. Overweight and red-faced, she was a far cry from the beauty Bob had known, but a glimpse of her body, which he had once hold and kissed, was enough to ignite his desire.
"Laura!" he shouted and quickened his stride. She turned her head and stopped walking. Their gazes met, and Bob saw that familiar twinkle in her eyes and knew that their passion just blossomed again.

 

[Tarheel]

Have I made any mistakes?

Bob caught sight of Laura, his old flame, who he had not seen in a long time. He was of two minds whether to approach her. Overweight and red-faced, she was a far cry from the beauty Bob had known, but a glimpse of her body, which he had once held and kissed, was enough to ignite his desire.
"Laura!" he shouted and quickened his stride. She turned her head and stopped walking. Their gazes met, and Bob saw that familiar twinkle in her eyes and knew that their passion had blossomed again.

Perhaps;

He was undecided about whether to approach her.

 

[NamelessKing]

Does "he was on the fence" work too?
Also, shouldn't it be "whom he had not..."?

 

[Tarheel]

1. Maybe.
2. No.

 

[Tdol]

In BrE, in two minds works.

 

[hatimhussain]

Perhaps; "Bob caught sight of Laura, his old flame, who he had not seen for a long time.

 

[Tarheel]

That's OK, but there's no reason to change the original.