Bob lay on his back

[Bassim]

Have I made any mistakes?

Bob lay on his back with his hands under his head, dwelling on his failures: two bankruptcies, three broken marriages, a stay in prison for one year for tax fraud, lost contact with his parents, and many other troubles. Where should a man in his fifties find the energy to start anew? he asked himself. He was losing passion for life and didn't know how to find it again. Not even the biggest lottery win would make him happy. Bob stared at the dark ceiling, occasionally lit by the lights of passing cars. How many nights he had spend driving around town and having fun in his Porsche! Nowadays he didn't even have a bicycle.

 

[teechar]

Have I made any mistakes?
lost contact with his parents,

That's out of step with the other ones.

He was losing his passion for life and didn't know how to find it again.

Not even the biggest lottery win would make him happy.

That would make me very happy.

Bob stared at the dark ceiling,

What ceiling?

[STRIKE]Nowadays[/STRIKE] But now, he [STRIKE]didn't[/STRIKE] doesn't even have a bicycle.

 

[Bassim]

I should have written "broken contact with his parents."
I should have used "a" instead of "the".
Bob stared at a dark ceiling.

 

[teechar]

I should have written "broken contact with his parents."

No, "losing contact with his parents".

I should have used "a" instead of "the".
Bob stared at a dark ceiling.

Ah, now I get what you mean. Try the following:

Bob stared at the dark ceiling, occasionally lit by the reflection of headlights [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] from passing cars.