Could you please check this?

[mamta choudhary]

Hi I am mamta choudhary.I have passed my 10th class from nagbani school.I did my 12th class from jain school.I have completed my graduation from women college.I got admission in m.com.

 

[tedmc]

Hi Mamta

Please pay attention to:
- punctuation marks
-capitalisation of special nouns
- spacing of sentences - leave a space after a period

You completed your degree and have graduated. You don't say you completed your graduation.
You got admitted/gained admission into a course.