Arronjjyy
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Hello teachers and students,
I am one of the students eagerly wish to improve English. I know my English is poor but I have patient in learning. I have written an article, and it is provided after correct by myself. Could you give me a better correction? And I am grateful for all your suggestion. Thank you in advance.
This is the IELTS writing topic: Opinions divided concerning what plays a more important role in people's personality development, nature or nurture, what is your opinion.
Following is my article:
Nature and nurture both have influence on people’s character construction. The discussion of which one is more important has been argued for a long time without a precisely outcome.
It has became a common sense that gene has an insidious influence on human individuality. People’s gene is inbred and unchangeable, it is impossible to find two people with same gene. So it is irrealizable to make experiments to measure the influence degree of people nature. The twins have the most similar gene and some researches reveal that even twins bring up by two different family, they have a highly resemblance on character and temperament. Obviously, nature will influence the personality development all the life.
But it does not mean personalities have been fixed after born. The education, experience and growing environment will change people a lot and have contribution to make up their individualities. We all know that the events people experience will change their mind and character, for example, after serve in the ranks people will become more persistent and dauntless. In the same way, the different nurture will bring different change in people’s personality development.
Both nature and nurture will influence people’s individuality, and until today people still quest which one play a more important roles in people’s life. It is hard to give a definite verdict now, but I believe all the people could give the child more positive influence by excellent nurture.