[General] Does this sentence sound nature?

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We rented a huge venue in our local building, so all the mandatory sports are going to be confined to it.

Any alteration to this sentence cause it seems to be a bit unnatural.


Thanks in advance.
 
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We rented a huge venue in our local building, so all the mandatory sports is going to be confined to it.

Any alteration to this sentence cause it seems to be a bit unnatural.


Thanks in advance.


For a start, why have you followed "sports" with "is"? And what does "mandatory sports" mean?
 

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Well, I have a writing to do which is about 'The school is going to make a compulsory PE every day, you were chosen to write a letter to the parents to inform them about it'. one of the details that I should mention is where the activities/sports are going to be held. that's it.I did write this phrase , but actually I think it's a bit awkward, so what do you think? do you have any other suggestions??

Thanks in advance. :)
 

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So this is homework?
 

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Nope, I have to do at least 3 writings a day to enhance my skills.In addition to this, I have other homework, like Grammar and vocabulary. What is your opinion about the sentence??
 
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It sounds like homework to me.

You should let your teacher see it first. Ask us again if you don't understand any of his/her corrections.

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You said "Well, I have a writing to do which is about 'The school is going to make a compulsory PE every day, you were chosen to write a letter to the parents to inform them about it'."

That sounds as if you have been given this task by a teacher or a tutor. You said "I have to do at least 3 writings a day ..." Who told you to do that? And who will check that you have done them?
 

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The writings is in my pastpapers and who check them friends of mine, who got higher mark than mine. my tutor doesn't mark them correctly, so I have stopped giving them my work, and I only do the Grammar and Vocab. work with them, but why all this? I want to know whether it's right or not!! that's it.
 

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We have rented a large space in our building to hold our PE classes.
 
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Saloom said he is doing the exercise on his own initiative and is getting his friend to check it for him. He has not expressed it very well but I think we should give him the benefit of the doubt.

We rented a huge venue in our local building, so all the mandatory sports are going to be confined to it.

venue in our local building - this is vague. What do you mean exactly? what local building?
mandatory sports - vague again, the compulsory PE sessions?
confined to it - wrong use of the word 'confine'. You can say : We rented a (place) to accomodate/hold the activities/sports

I suggest you keep your sentence simple by avoiding words like venue, mandatory, confine.

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