double comparison

[Jenny Nguyen]

Hi teacher,

Is it correct if I write like this "The more specific a comment was, the more likely it was to be accepted for revision"? (The context of this sentence is when a person comments on your writing, if the comment is clear and specific, it will be easier for the author to follow that comment)

Thank you very much

Jenny

 

[bhaisahab]

Yes, it's OK.

 

[Champleon]

Hi teacher,

Is it correct if I write like this "The more specific a comment was, the more likely it was to be accepted for revision"? (The context of this sentence is when a person comments on your writing, if the comment is clear and specific, it will be easier for the author to follow that comment)

Thank you very much

Jenny

Hello,

Well, I'm just a non-native retired teacher, so I'm not one of this Forum's teachers. Besides, I'm making my debut as Forum member.

I think your quoted expression is right. However, I may offer a suggestion in the expectation that it will be corrected by any of the Forum's teachers.
My suggestion: "The more specific a comment was, the more likely it was that they accepted it for revision".

 

[SoothingDave]

I like "accepted as a revision." The comment is not being revised, something else is being revised based on the comment.

 

[lotus888]

The more specific the comment, the more likely it will be accepted for revision.


--lotus

 

[MikeNewYork]

I like Dave's version better. "Accepted for revision" sounds as if the comment will be revised.