education of their children

keannu

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How Korean parents educate their children.
Many parents think that they want their children to grow up and have a stable job. Therefore, even if your child is under school age yet, you will send him or her to an academy.
They say that their children should play musical instruments, and to play the piano is essential. Girls are also spending a lot of time, saying they have to exercise. In particular, parents in Korea are worried about their children's retirement.
Therefore, if parents have a lot of money, they invest all this money in their children, try to send them to college easily, and make their children's qualification/specification with money.

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Please correct the mistakes, especially the underlined parts.
 

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The point about girls is odd in the context.
 

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How Korean parents educate their children.

Many parents [STRIKE]think that they[/STRIKE] want their children to grow up and have a stable job. Therefore, even if [STRIKE]your[/STRIKE] a child is [STRIKE]under[/STRIKE] not yet of school age, [STRIKE]yet,[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]you[/STRIKE] the parents will send him or her to an academy.

They [STRIKE]say[/STRIKE] believe that their children should play musical instruments; [STRIKE]and to[/STRIKE] in fact, playing the piano is essential.

Girls are also spending a lot of time, saying they have to exercise. This sentence makes no sense. What are the girls spending a lot of time doing? Who is saying they have to exercise?

In particular, parents in Korea are worried about what will happen when it is time for their children [STRIKE]'s retirement[/STRIKE] to retire.

Therefore, [STRIKE]if parents have a lot of money, they[/STRIKE] parents invest all [STRIKE]this[/STRIKE] their money in their children, try to send them to college [STRIKE]easily[/STRIKE], and make sure their [STRIKE]children 's[/STRIKE] they get good qualifications. [STRIKE]/specification with money[/STRIKE]

Please see my multiple corrections above, and my questions. The post is very confusing and messy. At its most basic level, you seem to be saying that Korean parents spend a lot of money on their children's education. Is that right?
 
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