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Emmett1

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Joined
Oct 13, 2022
Location
Canada
Member Type
Interested in Language
Native Language
German
Home Country
Germany
Current Location
Canada
Hello everyone,
I hope this the section.
Can someone check the email and tell me and most important fix spaces between them. Thanks in advance.

Dear xxx..

This is Emmett from xxx and I contact you to introduce our latest xxx.

xxx been in the industry for over 7 years and already generated value to companies by:
  • Deprecation of 32-bitS.
  • Deteriorating support and testing for X-forwarding.
  • Software/library version incompatibility.
Our website is xxx incase you would like to learn more about us and our last products.

Feel free to reach out to me for further information.

Kind regards,
xxx
 

teechar

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Joined
Feb 18, 2015
Member Type
English Teacher
Native Language
English
Home Country
Iraq
Current Location
Iraq
Hi Emmett1,
Are you really a native speaker of German living in Canada?
If not, then please edit your profile page and provide the correct information.
 

probus

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Staff member
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Jan 7, 2011
Member Type
Retired English Teacher
Native Language
English
Home Country
Canada
Current Location
Canada
Don't write "incase". It's two words.

I don't think software or software engineers normally deprecate anything. Look up "deprecate" in a dictionary. Also 'deteriorating support" seems very unlikely to be what you mean to say.

Simple words are almost always best.
 
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