Energy Bill

[PRD2021]

I noticed that the reading on the bill issued for my apartment was incorrectly entered. As per my records, the actual reading was 7560 taken on 5th May, not 9450 as mentioned in the bill. This difference is 1890 units and it is amounted to $ 150 which I can't bear as it is incorrect charges on my account.


Are the above sentences grammatically sound and natural? Please advise

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

[STRIKE]I noticed that[/STRIKE] The reading on the bill issued for my apartment is incorrect[STRIKE]ly entered[/STRIKE]. [STRIKE]As per my records,[/STRIKE] The actual reading was 7560, taken on 5 May, not 9450, as mentioned in the bill. This difference is 1890 units, and it amounts to $[no space]150, which [STRIKE]I can't bear as it[/STRIKE] is incorrect[STRIKE] charges on my account[/STRIKE].

Are the above sentences grammatically sound and natural? Please advise.

Punctuate the ends of all sentences.

Are you sending this to a utility company? Always tell us your source, even if the source is you.

I would not say "units." Units of what? Watts? Cubic feet? Cubic meters? Gallons? Liters? Name it.

In this kind of letter, be as concise as possible. You'll get better results.