Every spring, the meadow would explode

[Bassim]

Have I made any mistakes?

Every spring, the meadow would explode into a riot of wild flowers and butterflies. Groups of small girls dressed in bright colours would come running and laughing. They spread out picking flowers and weaving them into necklaces. The girls wore them proudly around their necks as if they were made of gold.

 

[Tarheel]

Have I made any mistakes?

Every spring (,) the meadow would explode into a riot of wildflowers and butterflies. Groups of small girls dressed in bright colours would come running and laughing. They spread out picking flowers and weaving them into necklaces. The girls wore them proudly around their necks as if they were made of gold.

A couple of minor changes.

That first sentence seems to be original, but it is a metaphor that does, I think, work quite well.