Expressing dissatisfaction in email

Yueehs

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Hi, I would appreciate it if someone can help by edit this simple email.


Dear Raju,

I think you should be more attentive to workers needs instead of having me to keep reminding you on things that you haven't done.
If the gate pass is a mandatory document, you should have sent me instruction on getting the pass issued.
 

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Hi, I would appreciate it if someone can help [STRIKE]by[/STRIKE] to edit this simple email.


Dear Raju,

I think you should be more attentive to the workers' needs instead of [STRIKE]having [/STRIKE]me having to keep reminding you [STRIKE]on[/STRIKE] about things that you haven't done.
If the gate pass is [STRIKE]a [/STRIKE]mandatory [STRIKE]document[/STRIKE], you should have [STRIKE]sent me instruction on getting[/STRIKE] informed me to get the pass issued.
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Hi. I would appreciate it if someone can help me by editing this simple email.


Dear Raju,

[STRIKE]I think you should be[/STRIKE] I would appreciate if if you would pay more [STRIKE]attentive[/STRIKE] attention to workers' needs. [STRIKE]instead of having me to keep reminding you on things that you haven't done.[/STRIKE] The final part, that I have crossed out, is completely irrelevant to the rest of the sentence.

If the gate pass is [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] mandatory [STRIKE]document[/STRIKE], you should have [STRIKE]sent me instruction on getting[/STRIKE] told me how to get [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] a pass. [STRIKE]issued.[/STRIKE]

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In the last paragraph, emsr2d2 changed the OP's sent me instruction to told me how.

If Raju was in a position to issue the pass, he would have done it himself and not have to tell his boss how to do it.
 
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The email is to Raju, not from them.
 

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The email is to Raju, not from them.

Who is "them"? I thought there was only Raju and his boss.
And how is it relevant to my previous post?
 

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Let's wait for Yueehs to clarify the meaning of the original post. I agree with emsr2d2's comment about the first sentence.
 

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Who is "them"? I thought there was only Raju and his boss.

I believe 5jj used the gender-free "them" because we don't know if Raju is male or female. 5jj could have written "The email is to Raju, not from him/her".
 

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Okay, I am familiar enough with Indian names to know that "Raju" is a male.

I still do now see how the two paragraphs are related. We can only guess what they mean.
 

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I still do now see how the two paragraphs are related. We can only guess what they mean.
See my post above. Be patient and wait for the OP to respond.
 

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Thank you all for helping me out.

Raju is the person responsible for worker welfare but he is not in-charge of issuing passes.
He should send me the instruction so that I can find the right person to issue the pass.
 

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Thank you all for helping me out.

Raju is the person responsible for worker welfare but he is not in no hyphen here charge of issuing passes. He should [STRIKE]send[/STRIKE] have sent me [STRIKE]the instruction[/STRIKE] some instructions/information so that I [STRIKE]can[/STRIKE] could find the right person to issue the pass.

See above.
 

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Tedmc, I recommend that you get comfortable with the singular they. I hated and avoided it for years, but for better or worse it's here to stay. Gender-neutral English is required these days, and the singular they eliminates a great deal of fuss and bother.
 
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