[Grammar] Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to this wo

[wisdomeyed]

Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to this world.

Does this make sense?
Does it have any grammatical errors?

 

[bhaisahab]

It doesn't make sense.

 

[Matthew Wai]

Does the one below make sense?
'Following the scents of flowers, one could see the view not seeming to belong to this world.'

Not a teacher.

 

[Rover_KE]

No, Matthew, it doesn't. Don't forget to add 'Not a teacher'.

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Welcome to the forum, wisdomeyed.

Tell us in simple terms what you want the sentence to mean.

If it is not your sentence, tell us where you read it and who wrote it.

 

[wisdomeyed]

[What I wanted to say] Following the scents of flowers....

wisdomeyed, it wasn't necessary to start a new thread to answer my question. I have merged this thread with the earlier one.

Following the scents of flowers, did unfold the view not seeming to belong to this world.

This is the original sentence.

I wanted to say...

As I followed the scents of the flowers, I found a such beautiful scenery that didn't seem to belong to this world(earth).

How can I say it concisely using a participial construction?

 

[Tdol]

Re: [What I wanted to say] Following the scents of flowers....

Not to me.

You could try something like Following the scents of the flowers, I came across an unearthly beauty. However, it's still not a good sentence to me.

 

[Matthew Wai]

Re: [What I wanted to say] Following the scents of flowers....

The OP wants a participial construction, is 'a beautiful scene hardly existing in the world' acceptable?

Not a teacher.

 

[emsr2d2]

No.

How about "Following the scent of flowers, I came upon a scene which seemed to belong to another world"?

 

[canadian45]

No.

How about "Following the scent of flowers, I came upon a scene which seemed to belong to another world"?

I would prefer a more explicit indication that the other world is more glorious than our world.

(something like) "Following the scent of flowers, I came upon a scene which seemed worthy of (another)(a better) world."

 

[Matthew Wai]

'a beautiful scene hardly existing in the world'

Is it unacceptable because it doesn't make sense?

Not a teacher.

 

[Tdol]

Yup- this doesn't mean that it is very rare.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

A scene of other-worldly beauty?