[General] Formal Email

[LayalHana]

Hello I am new in usingenglish.com
Please I need your help

I want to write email to contractor companies to send for them my company cables as built drawing in attachment file and I need to add some details about it in email such as depth and finally I want to them about there work plan
And I want to tell them if need any more details to contact me


Please I need your help I am new in formal email and in English language


Layal

 

[emsr2d2]

Welcome to the forum.

Try to write the email yourself, post it here and then we will comment on it.

 

[LayalHana]

Yes its good idea

Dear sir,

Kindly find my company cables as-built drawing attached
And please be informed that the depth of the cables (2-3)m .

Please my company need to know your work plan

For any more details Please don't hesitate to contact me

Best Regards,



Please I need your help if its formal and correct

 

[emsr2d2]

The first thing you need to do is add punctuation to your posts and your draft email. Always follow these rules of written English:

- Start every sentence with a capital letter.
- End every sentence with a single, appropriate punctuation mark.
- Always capitalise the word "I".
- Always capitalise proper nouns.
- Do not put a space before a full stop, comma, question mark or exclamation mark.
- Always put a space after a full stop, comma, question mark or exclamation mark.

You have capitalised some strange words in your post. There is no reason to capitalise "regards" in "Kind regards". There was no reason to capitalise "please" after "For any more details,". You have used "please" three times in a very short email. You don't need all of them.

 

[LayalHana]

Please can you rewrite it in formal way
I will improve my English but sure I need some times

 

[emsr2d2]

We expect you to use the advice and information that we give you. I clearly told you that every sentence must end with a punctuation mark. You ignored that advice in your last post. Until you heed that advice, I will not give you any more help.

 

[Raymott]

Dear Sir/Madam,

You can't assume that all bosses are male these days.