rodgers white
Senior Member
- Joined
- Jan 17, 2016
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- English Teacher
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- Chinese
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- China
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- China
Hi everyone, are there any mistakes or repetitions in this piece of writing? I'm grateful for any contribution.
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Yang, barely holding himself together, said. “Rui, are we in time? He is so pale, so weak. I can’t bear to lose him”. Rui said nothing; he was putting almost all of his concentration into guiding the nanobots. One word appeared in blue, Gan’s favourite colour. “PATIENCE”, then, a few moments later, “Yes, it’s working, so far so good”. Gan’s vitals started to improve, slowly at first, so slowly, it was barely noticeable. On the monitor screen, where the representations of the nanobots at the tumour site were previously only a few small dots, Yang could see the nanobots were now surrounding the tumour, and it was slowly shrinking. Rui now spoke, “My friend, sorry for my silence. I put every possible Bit and Byte of memory into my work; there was not enough left with which to speak. The tumour is being safely eradicated, and Gan will be fine” Gan’s vitals were soon back to normal, even so, he did not awaken.
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Yang, barely holding himself together, said. “Rui, are we in time? He is so pale, so weak. I can’t bear to lose him”. Rui said nothing; he was putting almost all of his concentration into guiding the nanobots. One word appeared in blue, Gan’s favourite colour. “PATIENCE”, then, a few moments later, “Yes, it’s working, so far so good”. Gan’s vitals started to improve, slowly at first, so slowly, it was barely noticeable. On the monitor screen, where the representations of the nanobots at the tumour site were previously only a few small dots, Yang could see the nanobots were now surrounding the tumour, and it was slowly shrinking. Rui now spoke, “My friend, sorry for my silence. I put every possible Bit and Byte of memory into my work; there was not enough left with which to speak. The tumour is being safely eradicated, and Gan will be fine” Gan’s vitals were soon back to normal, even so, he did not awaken.
