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EDarcy

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‘It’s a good thing we cannot predict the future accurately.’ Agree or disagree with this statement, drawing on your personal experiences, your observation of the others, or your reading.
Some people would give a lot to understand what would happen in their lives in future. However, sometimes is better to live in ignorance without knowing what exactly impends, no matter if it is something very good or causing difficulties.
Firstly, the unpredictable future gives people the opportunity to live a more pleasant life. They do not know if they are going to face a terrible and dangerous situation tomorrow, how long they will be alone or what will be their life expectancy, for instance. In this way, humans are freed from worrying about unreal situations and are more likely to enjoy the present moment with their beloved ones.
Secondly, the unclear future makes people more ambitious about almost everything, including their desire to turn into better persons. In this way, human beings work really hard to achieve their goals and dreams because they are convinced that their future depends only on them. As a result, people put all their efforts in improving themselves by learning new things about the world, they educate themselves and find proper jobs for them in order to get the certainty that their future will be bright.
Lastly, not being able to predict the future has a good influence on the social order. If people had known what exactly is going to happen in the next days, months or years to the human race, especially if it is something which can lead to the end of humanity, the state of anarchy would have been impossible to avoid. Not following the rules and amoral actions could be real consequences of the accurate and, at the same time, terrifying future predictions. However, such a situation does not exist and most of the people live in a stable society.
In conclusion, the fact that people are far away from predicting the future accurately helps humans to live with hope and self-assertiveness. In addition, not knowing what follows next protects people from harmful thoughts, stressful life and social disorder, and helps them to develop their personalities.
 

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Hello EDarcy, and welcome to the forum. :)
Some people would give a lot to [STRIKE]understand[/STRIKE] know what [STRIKE]would[/STRIKE] will happen in their lives in future. However, sometimes it is better to live in ignorance without knowing what exactly awaits, [STRIKE]impends,[/STRIKE] no matter if it is something very good or not. [STRIKE]causing difficulties.[/STRIKE]

Firstly, [STRIKE]the unpredictable[/STRIKE] not knowing the future [STRIKE]gives[/STRIKE] allows people [STRIKE]the opportunity[/STRIKE] to live a more carefree and pleasant life. They do not know if they are going to face a terrible and dangerous situation tomorrow, how long they will be alone or what [STRIKE]will be[/STRIKE] their life expectancy will be, for instance. In this way, [STRIKE]humans[/STRIKE] people are freed from worrying about [STRIKE]unreal situations[/STRIKE] future events and are more likely to enjoy the present moment with their beloved ones.

Secondly, the [STRIKE]unclear[/STRIKE] uncertain future makes people more ambitious about almost everything, including their desire to always improve. [STRIKE]turn into better persons. In this way, human beings[/STRIKE] It is an incentive for people to work really hard to achieve their goals and dreams because they are convinced that their future depends only on them and their actions. As a result, people put all their efforts into improving themselves by learning new things about the world. They get educated [STRIKE]themselves[/STRIKE] and find proper jobs [STRIKE]for them[/STRIKE] in order to [STRIKE]get the certainty[/STRIKE] ensure that their future will be bright.

Lastly, not being able to predict the future has a good influence on the social order. For example, if people [STRIKE]had[/STRIKE] can know what exactly is going to happen in the next few days, months or years [STRIKE]to the human race, especially if it is something which can lead to[/STRIKE] or can predict when the end of the world would be, [STRIKE]humanity, the[/STRIKE] a state of anarchy would [STRIKE]have been[/STRIKE] be impossible to avoid. [STRIKE]Not following the rules and amoral actions could be real consequences of the accurate and, at the same time, terrifying future predictions. However,[/STRIKE] Fortunately, such a situation does not exist, and most [STRIKE]of the[/STRIKE] people live in a stable society.

In conclusion, the fact that people [STRIKE]are far away from predicting[/STRIKE] cannot predict the future accurately helps [STRIKE]humans[/STRIKE] us to live [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] a hopeful and happy life. [STRIKE]self-assertiveness.[/STRIKE] In addition, not knowing what follows next protects [STRIKE]people[/STRIKE] us from harmful thoughts, a stressful life and social upheaval. [STRIKE]disorder, and helps them to develop their personalities.[/STRIKE]
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