help with a sentence

[HelpReceiver]

hello, im having troubles writing this professional sentence, below, which has high level of importance in my email,

Kind Note, Be advised that, due to my work location being under the ground i am unable to receive phone calls, saturdays excluded


it doesnt sound right

any help would be much appreciated, thank you in advance for ur time

 

[tedmc]

You cannot receive all phone calls including those using fixed line phones or only mobile phones?
That doesn't sound plausible.
Do you also work underground on Sundays?

Not a teacher

 

[HelpReceiver]

yes including the fixed line phone calls landline and mobile cant receive them, i start work at 8:00 am and get off at 5:40 PM
but saturdays and sundays no work

 

[Matthew Wai]

'Please note that I cannot receive any phone calls from 8:00 a.m. to 5:40 p.m. on weekdays, because I have to work underground.'

Not a teacher.

 

[emsr2d2]

Hello, [STRIKE]im[/STRIKE] I'm having [STRIKE]troubles[/STRIKE] trouble writing [STRIKE]this[/STRIKE] the [STRIKE]professional[/STRIKE] sentence (no comma here) below, which [STRIKE]has high level of importance [/STRIKE] is very important in my work email.

[STRIKE]Kind Note,[/STRIKE] Please be advised that, due to my work location being [STRIKE]under the ground[/STRIKE] undertground, I am unable to receive phone calls (Saturdays excluded).

It doesn't sound right. [STRIKE][/STRIKE]

Any help would be much appreciated. Thank you in advance for your time.

Yes I can't receive calls on any line including [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] fixed line phones [STRIKE]calls[/STRIKE] (landline) and mobile. [STRIKE]cant receive them,[/STRIKE] I start work at 8:00am and get off at 5:40pm [STRIKE]PM[/STRIKE] but I don't work on Saturdays and Sundays. [STRIKE]no work[/STRIKE]

Please see my corrections above. It's important to follow the rules of written English:

- Start every sentence with a capital letter.
- End every sentence with a single, appropriate punctuation mark.
- Always capitalise the word "I" (first person singular).
- Do not put a space before a full stop, comma, question mark or exclamation mark.
- Always put a space after a full stop, comma, question mark or exclamation mark.

MatthewWai gave you a very good version of your sentence.

 

[MikeNewYork]

What is the point of having a fixed landline in a place where it cannot receive phone calls?

 

[emsr2d2]

Maybe it accepts internal calls from people working in other parts of the building.

 

[HelpReceiver]

Maybe it accepts internal calls from people working in other parts of the building.

exactly

 

[emsr2d2]

Exactly.

Please look back at the rules of written English I gave you in post #5. The capitalisation and punctuation rules apply to every sentence, even a very short one like the one you posted.

 

[Matthew Wai]

saturdays and sundays

They can simply be called 'weekends', according to http://www.oxfordlearnersdictionaries.com/definition/english/weekend_1

Not a teacher.