[Grammar] his is the email that I got upon that requisition

[Jacaranda]

Hi,

I am wondering if the sentence below is natural and grammatical,

Below is the email that I received upon that requisition was successfully completed.

 

[probus]

It isn't.

Do you mean "when that requisition was completed"? If not, what are you trying to say?

 

[Jacaranda]

It isn't.

Do you mean "when that requisition was completed"? If not, what are you trying to say?

Yes. I used "upon", instead of using "when", to give the meaning that as soon as completed I received that email. But I am not sure if I used "upon" correctly in that sentence.

 

[Tarheel]

Try:

Below is the email I received when the requisition was completed.

(If you delete the word "successfully" whenever you see it you will eliminate an unnecessary word.)

 

[jutfrank]

Yes. I used "upon", instead of using "when", to give the meaning that as soon as completed I received that email. But I am not sure if I used "upon" correctly in that sentence.

To use upon in this way, follow it with a noun form:

... upon completion of ...