How is my writing style?

[new2grammar]

In our modern day world of high stakes, higher decibel levels, pressing
schedules, fierce competition and shrinking attention spans, only the
most attractive, innovative, persuasive and powerful packaging can get
undivided attention.

Not everyone has the time, patience, creativity and talent to do what it
takes to be heard and noticed but everyone has a compelling need to
put their best foot forward.


I would appreciate if you point out any mistakes, if at all present
Regards,

 

[Rover_KE]

Your writing is fine.

I would appreciate it if you would point out any mistakes. [STRIKE]if at all present[/STRIKE]
Regards,

Rover

 

[TheParser]

***** NOT A TEACHER *****


New2Grammar,

(1) I agree with the teacher: your writing is awesome!

(2) I do not wish to nitpick (complain about little, unimportant things), but I

feel that I should bring two little matters to your attention:

(a) Some people would prefer a hyphen:

In our modern-day world ....

(i) Some might even advise dropping "day": In our modern world ....

(b) Some people would feel more comfortable with a comma:

...and noticed, but everyone has ....