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Yueehs

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Hi, I would appreciate it if someone can help me by editing this email.

As the world economy is recovering, our company business has started to pick up we are actively recruiting hardworking individual to fill in our production operators vacancies.

Here are the job descriptions:

1.Set up the machine for the daily production operations.
2.Conduct visual checks on the finished products as per superiors guidance.
3.Maintain cleanliness of machines & workplace.

Our factory is located at 70 Tuas. Transport for pick up and drop off is provided at Jurong MRT station.

We would appreciate if you could share this to your members.
 
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teechar

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Hi, I would appreciate it if someone can help me [STRIKE]by[/STRIKE] edit [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] this email.

As the world economy is recovering, our (company's) business has started to pick up, and we are actively recruiting hardworking individuals to fill [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] our production operators vacancies.

[STRIKE]Here are the[/STRIKE] Job description:
1.Set up the machine for the daily production operations.
2.Conduct visual checks on the finished products as per [STRIKE]superiors[/STRIKE] supervisor guidance.
3.Maintain cleanliness of machines & workplace.

Our factory is located at 70 Tuas. Transport for pick up and drop off is provided at Jurong MRT station.

We would appreciate if you could share this [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] with your members.
What do you mean by "members"?
 

Yueehs

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I am sending this email to a nonprofit organization in hopes that they will share this information with their members.
 

teechar

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I am sending this email to a nonprofit organization in the hope that they will share this information with their members.
I see.
 

emsr2d2

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1. space here Set up the machine for the daily production operations.
2. space here Conduct visual checks on the finished products as per superiors guidance.
3. space here Maintain cleanliness of machines & workplace.

See above. You must put a space after a full stop belonging to a numbered list, exactly as you would put a space after a full stop at the end of a sentence.
 

Tarheel

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Say:

I would appreciate it if someone would help me edit this email.

Or:

Please help me edit this email.
 

Tarheel

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Try:

As the world economy is recovering from the shutdowns ....
 
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