[Essay] Large supermarkets are replacing small local shops all around the world.

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The prosperity of supermarkets is worldwide tendency. It can be explained with the process of globalization and, of course, with the benefits that large shops offer and their advantages over the small local shops.

The first prerequisite for the success of supermarkets is that they support counties’ economy. They provide employment for many people with different qualifications - from cleaners to managers. In this way, unemployment is reduced and citizens are able to pay their taxes and bills which is beneficial for any country’s economic development.

The second reason why supermarkets are flourishing today is because they save a lot of time. Huge shops often gather services, products, goods or food in one place. In this way, instead wandering aimlessly around different smaller shops, people know where exactly to find what they need. For that reason, supermarkets become preferred place for doing shopping.

Lastly, supermarkets owe their success to the diversity of products they offer to their clients. Small local shops cannot conquer the variety of exotic, healthy and, usually, expensive foods or any other product that can be found in supermarkets. In addition, the high quality of these goods in most supermarkets make more and more people not to shop in small local shops but choose to buy what they need in their everyday life from large shops.

To summarise, supermarkets are flourishing business nowadays. They support world economy by providing employment for people; they also facilitate people’s life by saving their time, which is important in the fast-paced world we all live in; and offer diversity of high-quality products. These advantages explain the domination of supermarkets over the small local shops.
 
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I think for the first sentence you want to say "the proliferation of supermarkets" or "the spread of supermarkets" and that is explained by what is known in economics as the economy of scale.
 

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Third paragraph. Say:

For that reason, supermarkets have become the preferred place for shopping.
 

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Fourth paragraph. Perhaps:

Third, supermarkets owe their success to the diversity of products they offer their customers. Small local shops cannot offer the variety....

I would use persuades rather than make there. Also, say: everyday lives.

You can't have more than one last paragraph.
 

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Last paragraph. Say:

To summarize, supermarkets are flourishing businesses nowadays. They support the world economy by providing employment for people. They also facilitate people's lives by saving them time...
 

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The prosperity of supermarkets is worldwide tendency.
The proliferation of supermarkets is a wordwide trend.

It can be explained [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] by the process of globalization and, of course, with the benefits and advantages that the large establishments [STRIKE] shops[/STRIKE] offer [STRIKE]and [/STRIKE][STRIKE]their advantages[/STRIKE] over[STRIKE] the[/STRIKE] small local shops.

The[STRIKE] first prerequisite[/STRIKE] main reason for the success of supermarkets is that they support countries’ economy. They provide employment for [STRIKE]many people with different qualifications[/STRIKE] the difference categories of the populace - from cleaners to managers. In this way, unemployment is reduced and citizens are able [STRIKE]to pay their taxes and bills[/STRIKE] be gainfully employed, which is beneficial for any country’s economic development.

The second reason why supermarkets are flourishing today is [STRIKE]because [/STRIKE] that they save consumers a lot of time. Huge shops often [STRIKE]gather[/STRIKE] offer services, products, goods or food [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] at one place.[STRIKE] In this way[/STRIKE], Instead [STRIKE]wandering aimlessly [/STRIKE][STRIKE] around[/STRIKE] of shopping and searching at [STRIKE]different[/STRIKE] smaller shops, people [STRIKE]know where exactly to[/STRIKE] can easily find what they need under one roof. For that reason, supermarkets become the preferred place for doing shopping.

Lastly, supermarkets owe their success to the diversity of products they offer to their clients. Small local shops [STRIKE]cannot conquer[/STRIKE] are unable to stock the variety of exotic, healthy and, usually, expensive foods or[STRIKE] any[/STRIKE] other products that can be found in supermarkets. In addition, [STRIKE]the high quality of these goods in most supermarkets make more and more people not to shop in small local shops but choose to buy what they need in their everyday life from large shops.[/STRIKE]due to the reputation they have to maintain, the larger supermarkets would give some degree of assurance of the quality of the goods they sell.


These advantages explain the[STRIKE] domination[/STRIKE] predominance of supermarkets over the small local shops.
 
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