[General] layout wording

[Ashiuhto]

Is the wording of the following layout acceptable to native speakers?

Internet Addiction in Junior High School Students
Written by Sarah Zeng (910), Regina Zhou (910) & Kelly He (916)
Commented and corrected by Tony Luo
Correction date: March, 2013

p.s. The italics are the title, and the parentheses stand for class.

 

[Rover_KE]

I'd embolden the title and delete 'Commented and'.

 

[Ashiuhto]

Internet Addiction in Junior High School Students
Written by Sarah Zeng (910), Regina Zhou (910) & Kelly He (916)
Corrected by Tony Luo
Correction date: March, 2013

 

[Barb_D]

I would suggest "edited" instead of "corrected."

 

[Ashiuhto]

Internet Addiction in Junior High School Students
by Sarah Zeng (910), Regina Zhou (910) & Kelly He (916)
March 2013

Edited by Tony Luo