left the country drained of hope

[alpacinou]

Hello.

I want to say there is no hope left in a city. Can I use "drain"?

Is this good?

Two decades of oppression had drained the city of all hope.

How can I make it better?

Also, how can I show it? I mean what words can I use to show a city is drained of hope?

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Hello.

I want to say there is no hope left in a city. Can I use "drain"?

Yes.

Is this good?

Two decades of oppression had drained the city of all hope.

Yes.

How can I make it better?

It's good as written.

Also, how can I show it? I mean what words can I use to show a city is drained of hope?

Give examples. Build a picture. Be concrete. Be specific.

As always: Don't try to say everything in one line. You can't. Let each line add something. Let it unfold for the reader.

 

[alpacinou]

As always: Don't try to say everything in one line. You can't. Let each line add something. Let it unfold for the reader.

Your advice has been very helpful Charlie.:up: I used to overwrite, but not anymore.