Official letter (requirement?) to museum

[helgah]

Hello!
I need to write an official letter from university to museum (I need just fill in the template) , to get an access to information about some exhibits from their collection, but I'm not sure how to write it in English correctly. Could you please give some examples or explain the rules?
That's my variant for a now:

To Director of (name of museum) Museum,

(first name, Surname)​

Dear (first name, Surname),

(My university name) asks you to give (My first name, patronimyc, surname), a 4th-year student of the Department of /// in the field of ///, an access to some materials from the collections of the Museum (receiving photographs and information about exhibits by e-mail) with aim to write a final thesis on the topic: "(name of topic)" (chronological framework of the study — X–XIV centuries, scientific supervisor — Associate Professor, PhD in Arts, (initials, Surname).

Vice-Rector for Scientific Work​

 

[teechar]

Hello!
I need to write an official letter from a/my university to a museum

(I need just fill in the template),

What does that mean? Do you already have the template, and if so, is what you wrote an English translation of it?

to get an access to information about some exhibits from their collection,

Could you please give some examples or explain the rules?

What examples and what rules? Do you mean you need help with proofreading/editing your letter?

That's my variant draft for a now:

Dear (first name, Surname),

That should be: Dear [title] [surname],
For example:
Dear Dr. Johnson,

For the rest of your letter, try to write actual words instead of dummy fillers. The words needn't be factual. That way, we can understand it better.
Post below.

 

[helgah]

What does that mean? Do you already have the template, and if so, is what you wrote an English translation of it?

What examples and what rules? Do you mean you need help with proofreading/editing your letter?

That should be: Dear [title] [surname],
For example:
Dear Dr. Johnson,

For the rest of your letter, try to write actual words instead of dummy fillers. The words needn't be factual. That way, we can understand it better.
Post below.

Thank you for the reply and correcting my mistakes

What does that mean? Do you already have the template, and if so, is what you wrote an English translation of it?

Yes,I have the template in Russian and I translated it in English. But I don't understand what the type this letter is and can't find an examples in English (where the University would ask the archive or another organization to give student access to smth).

That should be: Dear [title] [surname],
For example:
Dear Dr. Johnson,

the Director of this museum has no title like Dr.

actual words instead of dummy fillers

To Director of History Museum of Armenia ,
Eduard Grigoryan

Dear Eduard Grigoryan,

Moscow State University asks you to give to Ivan Ivanovich Ivanov, a 4th-year student of the Department of History in the field of Art-History, an access to some materials from the collections of the History Museum (receiving photographs and information about exhibits by e-mail) with aim to write a final thesis on the topic: "Architectural models" (chronological framework of the study — X–XIV centuries, scientific supervisor — Associate Professor, PhD in Arts, E.A. Sidorova).

 

[teechar]

Thank you for the reply and correcting my mistakes.

You're welcome.

Yes,I have the template in Russian and I translated it into English, but I don't understand what the type this letter is and can't find an examples in English (where the University would ask the archive or another organization to give student access to something smth).

Do you have to use that particular template?

The Director of this museum has no title like Dr.

Then, we use Mr (since his first name is Eduard).

To Director of History Museum of Armenia ,

Mr Eduard Grigoryan
Director,
History Museum of Armenia.

Dear Eduard Mr Grigoryan,

I am writing to you to request that access be granted to Moscow State University asks you to give to Ivan Ivanovich Ivanov, a 4th-year arts and history student of at the Department of History, in the field of Art-History, an access to some materials from the collections of the History Museum

(receiving photographs and information about exhibits by e-mail)

That's not very clear. Can you explain it?

with aim to write a He needs that for his final thesis on the topic: titled "Architectural models"

(chronological framework of the study — X–XIV centuries, scientific supervisor — Associate Professor, PhD in Arts, E.A. Sidorova).

Again, that's not very clear. Reword it.

 

[helgah]

You're welcome.

Do you have to use that particular template?

Then, we use Mr (since his first name is Eduard).





That's not very clear. Can you explain it?



Again, that's not very clear. Reword it.

I received a reply from museum that they need official letter from my University (where should be written the aim of receiving information and pictures) ,then they could give me information about objects in which I'm interested in.
I'm trying to figure out how best to write this letter in terms of Formal English.

 

[emsr2d2]

I received a reply from a museum notifying me that they need an official letter from my University (where should be written stating the aim of receiving information and pictures), then they could give me information about objects in which I'm interested. in.
I'm trying to figure out how best to write this letter in terms of formal English.