Well, I think that the usage of "everyone" is not appropriate because it means " all people" while you may want to express "some people". Therefore, I think it should be " most of us"
Remember, u have to use " participate in", not only participate [FONT="]Our goal was to prepare a lesson that includes the four skills of English and present it to our classmates. [/FONT] This sentence should be " Our task was to prepare a lesson including the four English skills then present it before whole class"
Remember! When u write an essay, u should avoid run-on mistake. Your writing should be concise Hence, u can shorten by using "including" instead of " that includes" [FONT="][/FONT] [FONT="]So[/FONT][FONT="], we sat together and put a plan showing everyone's role Don't use "so" at the beginning of the sentence. You can replace by " therefore or hence". " And" may be "to"
"Advice" is a uncountable noun. You should write " a piece of advice". [/FONT][FONT="]What distinguished our team that was every member[/FONT][FONT="].You should omit "that". [/FONT] [FONT="][/FONT] [FONT="]one skill of English [/FONT]-> a particular English skill. [FONT="]listening to English.[/FONT][FONT="] [/FONT]-> listening skill
Well, u said that every member of your team was good at on skill of English but why u mentioned only speaking, listening, grammar. What about reading and writing? [FONT="]any of other groups[/FONT][FONT="] [/FONT]->of is unnecessary, i think so!
[FONT="]through asking them[/FONT][FONT="] [/FONT]-> What is the function of "them"? [FONT="]to finish it[/FONT] -> "it" is unnecessary
[FONT="]She admired the presentation[/FONT] -> Can u find another expression? " Admire" sound not good because she is your teacher
Well, if I have time, i may read your writing more carefully. I hope my knowledge can support u ;-)