[Answered] Please Correct my letter/// as soon as possible

[Taleen]

Please correct this letter

Dear Sir,

I recieved a letter from the Admission Office but i want to know how can i register my required courses using my ID #?

I was having my ielts with band score 6.0 but it is expire 4 months ago so i did another ielts exam last saturday and the ielts results will be given on 14th Sept,2012 ... Can i register for courses before getting the IELTS result?

Since you know that i chose the Applied Mathematics Track which two required courses you advise me to take this semester.

I wish to consider employment as a graduate student at AUS so i want to know how can i involve? And what are your conditions?

Sorry for disturbing you.


yours sincerly,

 

[emsr2d2]

More than anything else, look at your capitalisation. Go back and edit your draft making sure you capitalise the word "I" (first person singular) every time, all proper nouns (ie IELTS) and capitalising the first word of every sentence. Then we'll look at the content.

 

[Taleen]

Please correct this letter

Dear Sir,

I recieved a letter from the Admission Office but I want to know how can I register my required courses using my ID #?

I was having my ielts with band score 6.0 but it is expire 4 months ago so I did another IELTS exam last saturday and the IELTS results will be given on 14th Sept,2012 ... Can I register for courses before getting the IELTS result?

Since you know that I chose the Applied Mathematics Track which two required courses you advise me to take this semester.

I wish to consider employment as a graduate student at AUS so I want to know how can I involve? And what are your conditions?


Sorry for disturbing you.


yours sincerly,



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I did as you told me esm2d2 .. I look forward to replying me:roll:

 

[emsr2d2]

Please correct this letter

Dear Sir,

I have received a letter from the Admissions Office but I [STRIKE]want[/STRIKE] would like to know how I can [STRIKE]I[/STRIKE] register for my [STRIKE]required[/STRIKE] courses using my ID number. [STRIKE]#?[/STRIKE]

I [STRIKE]was having my ielts with[/STRIKE] got band score 6.0 on my IELTS but it [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] expired 4 months ago. [STRIKE]so[/STRIKE] I did another IELTS exam last Saturday and [STRIKE]the IELTS results will be given[/STRIKE] I will get the result on 14th Sept,2012. Can I register for courses before getting the IELTS result?

[STRIKE]Since you know that I chose the Applied Mathematics Track which two required courses you advise me to take this semester.[/STRIKE] As you know, I chose the Applied Mathematics Track. Which two courses would you advise me to take this semester? (Note - I think this is what you mean but I am not quite sure.)

I wish to consider employment as a graduate student at AUS so I want to know how [STRIKE]can I involve[/STRIKE] to apply. [STRIKE]And[/STRIKE] What are your conditions of employment?

[STRIKE]Sorry for disturbing you.[/STRIKE]

Yours [STRIKE]sincerly[/STRIKE] faithfully,



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I did as you told me [STRIKE]esm2d2[/STRIKE] emsr2d2. I look forward to your reply. [STRIKE]ing me[/STRIKE]:roll:

Please see my changes above in red. I am not sure that I understood what you were asking in the paragraph starting "Since you know ..." in your original so I have guessed at the meaning. It might not be correct.

 

[Taleen]

Please see my changes above in red. I am not sure that I understood what you were asking in the paragraph starting "Since you know ..." in your original so I have guessed at the meaning. It might not be correct.

Thanks alot emsr2d2...and sorry for the mistakes

But I want to know is it wrong to say" required courses"??

Also I have another question .. if i say "" In which days the classes will be?"" Is it true?

 

[bhaisahab]

Thanks a lot emsr2d2...and sorry for the mistakes.

But I want to know is it wrong to say" required courses"? It's wrong in the context of the sentence.

Also I have another question .. if I say "In which days the classes will be?" Is it [STRIKE]true[/STRIKE] correct? No, it's not correct.

Bhai.

 

[Barb_D]

Are you 100% sure that the person reading your note is a male? If not, then starting "Sir" is a bad idea.

 

[Chicken Sandwich]

NOT A TEACHER

Also I have another question .. if i say "" In which days the classes will be?"" Is it true?

Here's my alternative, 'Which days do I have class?'

 

[Taleen]

Thanks all for your helping

I want to improve my English so I need your help