[Essay] Please help with my essay

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NicoleSouza

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Have you ever dream of becoming a celibrity? Many people believe that a celibrity have a wonderful life without problems or worries. In this essay will examine both sides of this issue.

One main advantage of being famous is the lifestyle it gives you. Most famous people are very rich and can afford whatever they want such as luxury houses, personal assistants or pleasure travels around the world. Another advantage is the oppurtunity of live exciting experiences and learn more about yourself.

On the other hand, there are also some important disadvantages. Famous people are often surrounded by fans and paparazzi when they go out. As a result, is very difficult for them to have a normal life. Secondly, they can´t spend much time at home as they often have to travel so much, for example if they are making a film or doing a concert tour.

All things considered, being a celibrity have both advantages and disadvantages. Nevertheless, I would like to live the experience at least for a while.
 
Have you ever dreamed of becoming a celebrity? Many people believe that a celebrity [STRIKE]have[/STRIKE]has a wonderful life without problems or worries. [STRIKE]In[/STRIKE] This essay will examine both sides of this issue.

[STRIKE]One[/STRIKE]The main advantage of being famous is the lifestyle [STRIKE]it[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]gives you[/STRIKE] that comes with it. Most famous people are very rich and can afford whatever they want such as luxury houses, personal assistants or pleasure travels around the world. Another advantage is the opportunity of [STRIKE]live exciting experiences[/STRIKE] living exciting lives and learn more about yourself.

On the other hand, there are also some important (major) disadvantages. Famous people are often surrounded by fans and paparazzis when they go out. As a result, it is very difficult for them to find privacy and have a normal life. Secondly, they can´t spend much time at home as they often have to travel so much, for example if they are making a film or doing a concert tour.

[STRIKE]All things considered[/STRIKE]In the final analysis, being a celebrity [STRIKE]have[/STRIKE] has both advantages and disadvantages. Nevertheless, I would like to [STRIKE]live[/STRIKE] experience the [STRIKE]experience[/STRIKE]life of a celebrity at least for a while.

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NicoleSouza, when will you submit your essay to your teacher/tutor to be marked?
 
So if you are famous you get to learn more about yourself?

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