[Grammar] Poor style?

[KSSEEJ]

Tom remember that Ann claimed that her mother refused to buy her a toy.


Is it a sentence in poor style?

Thanks so much

 

[Raymott]

Tom remember that Ann claimed that her mother refused to buy her a toy.
Tom remembers/remembered ...

Is it a sentence in poor style?

Thanks so much

Yes, it's poor style, even with the correction.

 

[susiedq]

Tom remembered that Ann claimed her mother refused to buy her a toy.

or

Tom remembers Ann claiming her mother refused to buy her a toy.

 

[BobK]

Tom, remember that Ann claimed that her mother refused to buy her a toy.


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Here's another possible correction, with 'remember' as an imperative. And if 'claimed' is stressed, I have no problem with the style.

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