Rescind

[PRD2021]

Mr. Ian has informed us that he will not join our company as a lead manager as his current employer is not relieving him and offering a salary increase instead.
He had decided to accept that offer instead, and he regretfully informed us that he needs to rescind his acceptance of our job offer.

Are the above sentences grammatically correct and more natural?

 

[teechar]

Note that we do not use a person's first name alone after their title.
Mr Ian.
Mr Ian Botham.
Mr Botham.

Try:
Mr. (Ian) Botham has decided to rescind his acceptance of our job offer and will not be joining our company as a lead manager. His current employer has offered him a salary increase which he has accepted.

 

[5jj]

My lawyer might use the word rescind; I wouldn't. I'd use withdraw here.

 

[emsr2d2]

his current employer is not relieving him

As you can see from teechar's rewrite, that part wasn't necessary but note that that is not a correct use of "relieve". We sometimes say that someone has been relieved of their duties, meaning that they were suspended or fired, but yours was not grammatical. In addition, it suggested (ungrammatically) that his current employer was refusing to let him leave. That wasn't the situation. They were clearly reluctant to lose him, evidenced by the fact that they offered him a pay rise to get him to stay.

 

[Tarheel]

In AmE, it's a pay raise or a raise in pay.