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[ziawj2]

I moved to my new home, and wanted to throw a party. Then I wrote an invitation letter to invite my friends to come for it. In the letter, I wrote:
I want to share something happy with you. We family moved to a new house. The whole families are so excited that we decide to hold a dinner party . . .
I think the first sentence is a bit wordy, could I made a change:
I want to share a happy thing with you — our family moved to a new home. . . .
I am afraid 'thing' still seems strange. What is your opinion? How about " I want to share with you about my moving to my new home!"?
Thank you!

 

[ziawj2]

If you are free

I moved to my new home, and wanted to throw a party. I wrote an invitation letter to invite my friends to come for it. At the end of letter, I am not sure which expression is natural and more acceptable to native speakers. could you give me your advice?
1) If you are free, just give me a call before the dinner.
2) If you can come, please call me before the dinner

 

[ziawj2]

The degree of famlity

I need to write an invitation letter, inviting my friends to my new home for dinner. I am expected to write it in informal style. Is the first sentence more informal than the second one by omitting the subject “I”? And I think there is no difference between “how are you” and “how is everything going” in terms of the degree of fomality. What is your opinion?

 

[Tdol]

Re: The degree of famlity

I can't see much difference between your How are you questions- you can use How are you in an informal letter. However, I don't know what you mean about the first and second sentences as you haven't included them in your post.

 

[Tdol]

How about:
I want to share some good news with you

 

[Barb_D]

Please use one thread for your question. I have merged them.

 

[emsr2d2]

How about:
"I want to share some good news with you"?

I thought you were supposed to write it in an informal style. That sentence sounds quite formal. I don't know how informal you are expected to be but this is how I would write a very informal invitation to my friends:

Great news! We've finally moved house. To celebrate, I'd love it if you came for dinner on Saturday night. Let me know asap if you can come.

 

[ziawj2]

I have two questions:
1) Did you write "came" instead of "come" because it is the subjunctive mood?
2) Is it necessary to change "on Saturday night" to "this Saturday night" to make it more clear? Thank you.
I'd love it if you came for dinner this Saturday night.

 

[emsr2d2]

1) "I'd love it if you came" or "I'd love it if you could come".
2) In BrE, if someone simply says "on Saturday night" we would assume they are talking about the next Saturday night which will occur. However, you could use "this" instead of "on" if you wish.