Short story "A Letter of Complaint, part one

[Bassim]

Thank you for your help, Tony
Now I understand what you mean. The title is "A Letter of Complaint", but actually it is a short story, just like any other short story. The difference is that the old man is telling it to an imaginary owner of the hotel instead to a reader. I have used this method just to try to write a short story in a different way, but I have kept all devices a writer uses in an ordinary short story, including dialogues and descriptions.

 

[Tarheel]

Bassim:

First of all, please don't remove any of that stuff. (Those are my favorite parts.) I like the way you describe things. It's part of what makes your writing so readable.

Tony:

If you read my corrections/suggestions you might have noticed that I removed at least half of the "hads". (After doing this for years, I have noticed there are two problems every ESL learner has.)

Bassim, rarely (if ever) does "dialogue" get pluralized. Instead of two or more dialogues we just have more dialogue.

I am eagerly awaiting more of the story.

 

[Tarheel]

Re: Short story "A Letter of Complaint", part one

Tony, he has already posted part two, and I am looking forward to part three.

 

[Tony Phillips]

Ok, no worries. Thanks for the clarification. Happy writing.