those countries/there/them

[I'm a Chubby Baby]

Hi, everyone. I wrote all the three.

Is it correct to switch from 'there' to 'those countries'?

1. In the future, there will be a higher proportion of older people than young people in many countries. I believe this is mainly because of longer life expectancies and lower birth rates there. However, it should be seen as a negative development because it can put those countries under enormous financial strain.

I think both 2 and 3 are correct. But 2 is clearer than 3 because in 2, 'them' is closer to 'those countries'. Is this correct?

2. In the future, there will be a higher proportion of older people than young people in many countries. I believe this is mainly because of longer life expectancies and lower birth rates in those countries. However, it should be seen as a negative development because it can put them under enormous financial strain.


3. In the future, there will be a higher proportion of older people than young people in many countries. I believe this is mainly because of longer life expectancies and lower birth rates in those countries. However, it should be seen as a negative development because it can put an enormous financial strain on them.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Hi, everyone. I wrote all the three.

Is it correct to switch from 'there' to 'in those countries'?

You can say "IN those countries."

All three versions are correct and give the same information.

 

[I'm a Chubby Baby]

Thanks, Charlie.
In 1 and 2 I used "enormous financial strain", whereas in 3 I used "an enormous financial strain". Even this is correct?

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Yes.

Someone here might recognize a nuanced difference between using an and not using it, but in your examples, it works either way.

 

[jutfrank]

You don't need to use anything at all in the first sentence. Just finish the sentence after birth rates. Also, you really ought to use will be instead of is since you're talking about a future cause.

For the second sentence, you just need to use countries.

 

[I'm a Chubby Baby]

You don't need to use anything at all in the first sentence. Just finish the sentence after birth rates.

Thank you very much.
Why don't I need to make it clear that I'm talking about life expectancies and birth rates in those particular countries, rather than globally?

Also, you really ought to use will be instead of is since you're talking about a future cause.

Do you mean the red "is" should be "will be"? But what I want to say is that longer life expectancies and lower birth rates right now will result in a higher proportion of older people than young people in the future.

In the future, there will be a higher proportion of older people than young people in many countries. I believe this is mainly because of longer life expectancies and lower birth rates. However, it should be seen as a negative development because it can put an enormous financial strain on countries.

 

[emsr2d2]

Why don't I need to make it clear that I'm talking about life expectancies and birth rates in those particular countries, rather than globally?

The previous sentence ends "in many countries". It's close enough to the next sentence to make it clear that you are talking specifically about those countries. You would need to specify if you were talking about the global situation.

 

[I'm a Chubby Baby]

The previous sentence ends "in many countries". It's close enough to the next sentence to make it clear that you are talking specifically about those countries. You would need to specify if you were talking about the global situation.

Thanks, what's about the red countries. How can I know it still refers to 'many countries' in the first sentence?

In the future, there will be a higher proportion of older people than young people in many countries. I believe this is mainly because of longer life expectancies and lower birth rates. However, it should be seen as a negative development because it can put an enormous financial strain on countries.