tide of darkness

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alpacinou

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Hello.

I want to say that darkness in enveloping people's lives in a society. Can I use "encroach"?

What do you think about this sentence?

A tide of darkness is encroaching into all their lives.

If "encroach" doesn't work, what other verb can I use?
 
Hello.

I want to say that darkness in enveloping people's lives in a society. Can I use "encroach"?

What do you think about this sentence?

A tide of darkness is encroaching into all their lives.

If "encroach" doesn't work, what other verb can I use?

Encroach doesn't work.

How about:
A tide of darkness shrouded their lives.
A tide of darkness swept through their lives.
 
We tend to use "encroach upon/on", not "into".
 
Encroach doesn't work.

No, it doesn't.


How about:
A tide of darkness shrouded their lives.

Avoid mixed metaphors. Tides don't shroud. I wouldn't use it.


A tide of darkness swept through their lives.

Better!
Al, if you're going to use tide, you need to follow it with a possible tidal action, like Ted's "swept through." Impossible images confuse readers.
 
You could use something like creeping if the tide is slow.
 
You could use something like creeping if the tide is slow.
Yes, and it would build the sinister feeling that "darkness" introduces.
 
Is this okay?

A tide darkness was creeping in their lives.
 
You've omitted a word. Go back and read that again!
 
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