Title correction

poongodi

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Jan 21, 2017
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India
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India
Please help me to correct the letter.
Dear Sir/Madam,
Ref:pension of Miss.Gunasundari\PPO 8609876
With reference to the above,we found in our records that the pensioner is a unmarried daughter of Late Mr.Raju whereas in your letter dated 02/02/19 it has been mentioned as widowed daughter of Mr.Raju. Therefore we are not able to process the pension sanctioning request of Miss.Gunasundari.In this connection please provide us the correct details with relevant documents at the earliest to make necessary action at our end.
 

Charlie Bernstein

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Jan 28, 2009
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English
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United States
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United States
Please correct this letter.

Dear (Use a person's name or the name of the company or organization. It's unlikely that the recipient is a knight or operates a brothel): (In a business letter, use a colon after the salutation.)
(Line space.)

Ref: (Put spaces after colons.) Pension of Ms. Gunasundari\PPO 8609876 (Miss is not an abreviation, so it doesn't get a period. In the US, Ms. is preferred.)
(Line space.)
With reference to the above, (Put spaces after commas) we have found in our records that the pensioner is a unmarried daughter of the late (He's not tardy. He's dead.) Mr. (Put spaces after periods.) Raju, (Use commas to separate the parts of compound sentences.) whereas your letter of 02/02/19 states she is the widowed daughter of Mr. (Space.) Raju. Therefore we are not able to process her pension-sanctioning (Use dashes to build adjectives out of two words.) request. Please provide us the correct details with relevant documents as soon as possible to make action at our end possible.
Just give her the money.
 
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