Two separate pieces of information in a sentence

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Hello everyone,

I'm currently having some trouble with multiple pieces of information on a single sentence, the main problem is that I'm not sure if I should use a comma or something else I'm not aware of:

"As the man's stew boiled and the aroma spread on the entire room, he walked to the table and picked up a spoon."

I'm known for overusing commas and just wanted to make sure if I'm doing this right.
 
Hello everyone,
Hello, and welcome to the forum. :)

I'm currently having some trouble with multiple pieces of information [STRIKE]on[/STRIKE] in a single sentence, [1] and the main problem is that I'm not sure if I should use a comma or something else I'm not aware of.

"As the man's stew boiled and the aroma spread [STRIKE]on[/STRIKE] around the entire room, he walked to the table and picked up a spoon."

I'm known for overusing commas and just wanted to make sure if I'm doing this right.
[1]: Without the "and", you had a comma splice error.

There's no need to clutter your sentences with unnecessary commas. The one above is fine as it stands (with the correction).
Note my other corrections.
Note also that I've moved your thread to our Ask a Teacher section.
 
You're welcome. In future, you can just click Thank/Like instead of writing a "Thank you" post. :)
 
The preceding text probably explains it but the two linked clauses don't seem to be related to me. I am curious what "the man's stew" is about. "Spread around" could be replaced with "permeated".
 
I am curious what "the man's stew" is about.

It's probably his dinner. "Stew" is a cooked dish of (usually) meat and vegetables in a thick gravy. His stew was boiling on the stove/hob and the smell was spreading around the entire room. He went to pick up a spoon to prepare to eat or serve his stew.
 
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